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6 October 2005 | 02:04
mood: crazycrazy
music: Green Day
posted by: bistokidsfan77 in the_safehouse

Title: No Man's Land
Author: bistokidsfan
Format: Short Story
Hatstand Archive: yes
Circuit Archive: yes
Pros-Lib: yes
Slash/Gen: Slash
Warnings: None
Summary: No man’s land isn’t just a stretch of warehouse.
Disclaimer: No lawyer’s gonna make a monkey outta me. The Professionals are owned by Brian Clemens et al, Bodie is owned by Doyle, & I wouldn’t mind being owned by Tommy


A/N: I always thought it was tragic that Tommy died at the end of ‘Heroes’. He had such a great naughty laugh and a smashing sexy black Capri. In my Prosverse, he’s alive, kicking, & as daft a bugger as ever.
A/N2: Ah, sunshine - my first Pros fic, so kindness is appreciated & feedback is lovely. This is for eldritchhobbit. Read the request and got bit by a plotbunny. Always did love Crazy Tommy.

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Doyle: No man’s land.

McKay: Someone’s got to cross, if we’re to be home in time for tea.

- Heroes



The bullets tore into him, stitching a neat diagonal of holes over his torso, somehow missing major organs. “Oh, bugger that burns,” crawled idly across his brain as he brought his rifle up and got off a couple of rounds at the raider crouched down by his car.

Making note that Doyle and Bodie were pounding down the path toward the river from the house, heedless of their own safety, he rolled and fired again, finally taking down the first raider. “Stupid berks,” he muttered, not differentiating much in his mind between the Bisto Kids and the raiders. Didn’t Cowley’s fair-haired boys know that he was the only one allowed to be crazy? Things got a bit fuzzy after that.

Throwing himself down behind the slight cover of slender tree trunks, Doyle fired on the other raider hiding behind the vehicle’s rear fender as Bodie slid in behind him to add his firepower. Numerous discharges later, Tommy finally got his eyes to focus and take in the scene. He allowed that Doyle could shoot, and bloody well, too, to take the bloke out at that angle.

Doyle got up carefully and nudged the raider with one foot while covering him with his semi-automatic. Dead as a mackerel. He turned to Bodie and alarm crossed his face when he noticed that his partner was still down on the ground, leaning at an odd angle against the bullet-scarred tree trunks. So still. So fucking still. A third assailant was face down, bleeding out from the double-tap that Bodie had given, a Sig .45 still held in his outstretched hand, pointing directly where Doyle had lain only a short time earlier.

Despite his own bleeding problems, Tommy noticed a line of scarlet sliding down a corner of Bodie’s mouth. “Oh, bloody buggering fuck,” his voice sounded strange, slurred and wavy, pondering the dubious miracle of having survived yet again while Bodie looked done for.

Pain-shrouded eyes met Doyle’s as Bodie struggled to speak, but Doyle shook his head, “Don’t talk,” and reached for his R/T.

“4.5 to Alpha 1. We’ve got an emergency here,” Doyle paused to pull in a labored breath that might have contained a sob. “Send two ambulances right away; Bodie and Tommy have both been hit. It…it looks bad,” his voice faltering as he finished.

“That’s my lad, never sugarcoat it,” Bodie managed to rasp out, then coughed, another thin red strand floated down from his mouth, like errant cotton candy.

“Shut-up, you miserable sod,” Doyle’s gentle touch to Bodie’s face belied his harsh words.

“Check on Tommy,” came Bodie’s faint but determined voice. Blue eyes met green, and Bodie took in Doyle’s sorrow, but still demanded. So seldom did this happen, that Doyle found it impossible not to obey.

“Don’t move, Bodie. Not a fucking inch.” Bodie’s slight smile lit his eyes even as the pain in his chest got worse. Ray spun around and crossed over to where Tommy lay sprawled on the damp riverbank.

“Tommy,” Doyle bent over the older agent, who lay crumpled to one side, his own trails of blood obscene on the green grass.

“Been known to answer to that on occasion,” Tommy replied hoarsely. “You’ll forgive me if I don’t get up.” Then, promptly wasted all that élan on a fit of coughing that turned his face red.

“Bugger that,” muttered Doyle as he carefully turned the other man a little to ease his breathing. “Better?”

“It’ll do,” Tommy replied muzzily. “Look after Bodie, Ray. He’s got a lung puncture.”

“So do you I imagine. He’s the idiot that sent me over to take a look at you.”

“Nah, just a few holes,” he looked up at Ray, intense and insistent. “Go, be with him. He needs you.”

Ray stared back at Tommy. The older agent’s eyes held his, and beyond the inevitable pain, conveyed understanding, even approval. “I called it in. Ambulances will be here any moment.” Tommy nodded, too spent to reply.

Ray crawled over and looked Bodie over. A greyish pallor suffused his skin and his eyes were dull with pain as he gazed back at Doyle, and his body had slid down the tree trunk to leave him leaning rather precariously to one side.

“How’s our Tommy?” he mumbled, lips sticky with blood he longed to wipe away, but his hand seemed far from his arm, and everything except Ray’s face was wavering in and out of focus.

“Positively beaming,” Doyle’s voice could cut glass. “Just a few holes, he says. Could water the flowerbeds with him if you gave him a glass of water.” He pulled himself behind his partner and gently eased him so he was sitting leaned again his chest. One hand stroked dark hair back from a clammy forehead while the other grasped an arm to keep Bodie from listing to one side.

“Best stick to whiskey then, eh?” Bodie croaked out, then gave an involuntary moan.

“Sounds like you could use a belt about now, mate,” Doyle’s voice held just the right trace of snark, but it was at odds with the tears running down his face.

Bodie gave a short laugh and murmured, “Maybe the Cow’ll have his flask on him when he gets here.”

“Filled with Laphroaig, no doubt,” Ray then buried his face in his partner’s shoulder, shuddering.

“It’ll be all right, sunshine,” Bodie crooned. “Just you wait and see.”

“It better be,” Doyle growled fiercely, finally looking up to see Tommy gazing at them intently.

The pain of his wounds had slid down amongst the things that he paid little attention to. It took dedication, but he’d had lots of practice managing pain. He watched Bodie and Doyle cling to each other as he lay ten or so feet from them on the muddied and bloodied grass next to the dead.

The wail of sirens filtered through the sounds of rushing water.

fin

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the_cornettist

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from: the_cornettist
date: 6 October 2005 09:13 (UTC)
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Well written. Interesting concept.

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 09:19 (UTC)
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Oh, instant feedback - you are a luv! Thanks so much. I *was* trying something new for me. I'm glad it worked for you.

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 10:33 (UTC)
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Thanks for the kind feedback; I'm glad the dialogue *worked*. My Britspeak is hazy beyond what I've gleaned from Pros eps & other tv & movies. Must admit, this one turned out a bit more angst-ridden that I'd originally planned. My muse took a left turn at Albequerque and refused to do anything else. I'm muddling around with a thought of a sequel, too. Tommy just inspires me :P

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P.R. Zed

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from: przed
date: 6 October 2005 10:59 (UTC)
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Saving Tommy is a brilliant idea, even if wounding Bodie in the process is a sure way to stomp on my heart. I do hope you'll continue this.

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 15:12 (UTC)
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Thanks so much. Truly, I didn't mean to stomp on your heart. Bodie is all right, promise! I'm ploughing through a sequel as we speak.

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Enednoviel

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from: enednoviel
date: 6 October 2005 11:31 (UTC)
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Love it! I agree with you, Tommy is such an interesting character, I'd have loved to see more of him.
But... ouch! Poor Bodie! For a moment I really thought you had killed him off! Love the banter. This is so typical of them, trying to come to terms with what has happened, trying desperately to keep a straight face.
Thanks for posting this!

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 15:13 (UTC)
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I love Tommy almost as much as I love Bodie, so never fear, the swissroll lad will be fine. Of course, after much angst, etc. Thanks for the kind feedback. I'm so thrilled with the response!

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Enednoviel

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from: enednoviel
date: 6 October 2005 17:29 (UTC)
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LOL... Your icon is hilarious! :D

I love Tommy almost as much as I love Bodie, so never fear, the swissroll lad will be fine.

Okay! You really scared me for a moment though. My poor heart!

Can't wait to read more Pros-fanfic written by you! :)

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Enednoviel

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from: enednoviel
date: 6 October 2005 17:32 (UTC)
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Oh, and I agree with the others: sequel? PWEEEEASSSE????
*makes huge puppy-dog eyes*

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 17:53 (UTC)
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I like making icons & themes - just finished my Pros one. I'm busy this afternoon, but am percolating the continuation of this storyline right now. *pets the puppy - good doggie* :p

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Amy H. Sturgis

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from: eldritchhobbit
date: 6 October 2005 13:21 (UTC)
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Gah! I'm leaving you notes all around the LJverse because I Can't. Stop. Squeeing. I'm amazed at how, in the process of saving Tommy, you've still managed to rip out my heart and stamp all over it. And make me love you for it, as well.

This line does me in: It took dedication, but he’d had lots of practice managing pain. He watched Bodie and Doyle cling to each other as he lay ten or so feet from them on the muddied and bloodied grass next to the dead.


This says so much about Tommy, and about Bodie and Doyle, and it paints such a stunning (and symbolic) visual picture of the three, two holding to one man's life so desperately, one rather ambivalent about his own there among the already dead. Augh! I can never thank you enough.

Back to another rereading...

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Amy H. Sturgis

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from: eldritchhobbit
date: 6 October 2005 13:39 (UTC)
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Okay, two more things:

1. It's great how Bodie is the one doing the reassuring as the three wait for help and regard each other. Great stuff.

2. The repeated, subtle notes about how both Bodie and Doyle have gained Tommy's attention, concern, and approval are heartwrenching and so lovely. Again, well done!

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Carla

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from: beledibabe
date: 6 October 2005 14:36 (UTC)
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Dittoing all of eldritchhobbit's comments because I'm too verklempt to think up my own.

::looks sadly at shattered pieces of my heart strewn across the floor::

Bugger.

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 15:22 (UTC)
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*hands forceps & evidence bag to beledibabe for retrieval of heart pieces*

Thanks so much for your feedback! I promise I'll try to make their suffering mean something - after more suffering of course :P

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 15:20 (UTC)
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*hugs eldritchhobbit* Your response is all and more that I could have hoped for. I tried very hard to capture Tommy as I saw him and how he could be if he survived. Also, how Bodie & Doyle relate to him, both separately and together. It turned into a moody, short piece - something I very seldom write. Most of my stuff is long and drawn out lol, but I really like the way it turned out.

Sorry to rip your heart out, but it sounds like you like it :P I'm muddling through ideas for a sequel as my muse now demands follow-up, insistent, rude bugger :D

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Amy H. Sturgis

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from: eldritchhobbit
date: 6 October 2005 15:37 (UTC)
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I tried very hard to capture Tommy as I saw him and how he could be if he survived. Also, how Bodie & Doyle relate to him, both separately and together.

Yes! You achieved these goals spectacularly. You've described exactly the reasons why this is so compelling.

Sorry to rip your heart out, but it sounds like you like it :P

Oh, I do, I do!! I've put it back in its proper spot, so it's all ready for more. Rip away. ;)

:stands on table and leads chant: SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!

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from: anonymous
date: 6 October 2005 16:15 (UTC)
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Really enjoyed this!

Lovely dialogue and banter brilliantly in keeping with the show itself. I liked that Tommy survived even if you gave poor Bodie and Doyle ( not to mention ME) a hell of a fright the process.

Hope you continue this :)

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Rachel

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from: rach74
date: 6 October 2005 16:16 (UTC)
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OOps!

The above comment was from me!

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 16:21 (UTC)
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Sorry to give ouchies to the Swissroll lad, but it's how it came out :D My muse insists there's more to the story, so I'm muddling through a sequel now.

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Rachel

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from: rach74
date: 6 October 2005 16:23 (UTC)
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Ooh look forward to it :)

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byslantedlight

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from: byslantedlight
date: 6 October 2005 16:33 (UTC)
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*immediately joins in chant for sequel*

What a thing to wake up to - my poor heart... :) My poor boys!
Thank you, very much looking forward to finding out what happens next!

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 16:37 (UTC)
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*flicks lighter & starts to chant sequel, sequel*

Oh, yeah. I gotta write it :p

I'm soooo glad you liked it. The response to my little fic has been so very awesome and gratifying. The lads are going through a bit of a rough patch. I'll have them giving lots of h/c to each other...

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Thoraa

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from: thoraarwin
date: 6 October 2005 22:38 (UTC)
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Oh, yes- sequel, please?*g* Loved the dialogue... so them.

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bistokidsfan

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from: bistokidsfan77
date: 6 October 2005 22:42 (UTC)
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I've got a thing tonight (channeling TWW - Toby I think ;), but will be working hard on beating my muse, uh encouraging productivity. I'm so glad you liked the fic and gave me feedback - better than choccy sometimes, ya know...

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