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4 July 2005 | 19:04
posted by: kiwisue in the_safehouse

Title: Good News Bad News
Author: KWS
Format: Ficlet
Hatstand Archive: Mmm – not yet. I tried to keep as close as possible to the 200 word mark (as it was, I went over) but there’s a bit more meat I want to add later to these here bones.
Circuit Archive: Ditto
Pros-Lib: Ditto
Slash/Gen: Slash
Disclaimer: Not mine, just playing
Summary: My title was “Good News Bad News” by David Wolstencroft


Good news, bad news, all the news that’s fit to print and a good deal more. And on page 37, a small advertisement concerning the recovery of ‘valuable property’ from an address in Wapping that gave Cowley, and therefore Bodie, sudden hope. Hope that the plans for a new Anglo-American V/STOL jet fighter were still in the country. And hope, ever so faint, that Doyle was alive.

So now Bodie was standing flat and silent against a warehouse wall, sweating slightly, while harsh voices barked from inside the building and the meaty sound of fist on flesh slapped his ears.

Hold on… won’t do him any good if you go in too early… hold on, Ray…

A moment later, Murphy chucked a smoke canister through the opposite window and Bodie charged, yelling for Doyle to get down, get away. Moving from one concrete pillar to the next, firing as he went at the men who had been caught flat footed, turning to face completely the wrong direction. Caught between the two agents, Doyle’s captors either died in the storm of fire or were lucky enough to quickly throw themselves to the ground and cast their weapons away as a sign of surrender. It was over within minutes.

The smoke spread out as the sluggish wind caught hold of it, blanketing the area worse than fog. While Murphy covered the still living and called for back-up, Bodie looked about. Doyle lay half-hidden where he’d wriggled behind a stack of crates, his hands still bound behind his back. Heart thumping, an odd wrenching feeling in his gut, Bodie checked him for wounds and was glad to find only bruising.

“Good news mate, you’ll live”

“Great. About time you got here. Untie me, willya?”

Bodie grinned elatedly. *I must be crazy*. “Oh no, angelfish, not quite yet”.

Relief gave him a crazy courage. He bent down and in the shadow-light his lips took firm possession of his astonished partner’s mouth.

End?

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Comments {13}

Nikki

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from: nakeisha
date: 4 July 2005 09:24 (UTC)
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Oh, very nice indeed. I love the last line.

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Caro Dee

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from: carodee
date: 4 July 2005 10:03 (UTC)
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Great action and tension! Especially for 200 words. And Bodie's relief at the end was loads of fun. *g*

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kiwisue

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from: kiwisue
date: 4 July 2005 10:41 (UTC)
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Thanks very much - although it wound up over 300. I did a 200 word version but felt the ending didn't have enough oomph.

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Caro Dee

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from: carodee
date: 4 July 2005 10:59 (UTC)
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I enthusiastically support more Bodie/Doyle... oomph.*g*

And 300 is not a lot to work with. Therefore, still impressed.

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 4 July 2005 11:16 (UTC)
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Ooh intriguing - more please??

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kiwisue

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from: kiwisue
date: 5 July 2005 21:58 (UTC)
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Maybe.. *g*

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kiwisue

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from: kiwisue
date: 4 July 2005 12:52 (UTC)
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Fixed :-) Apart from the comma in the body, but that's staying there now!

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Lesley

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from: vesta_sgc
date: 4 July 2005 13:38 (UTC)
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Oh NICE!!!

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shayheyred

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from: shayheyred
date: 4 July 2005 20:22 (UTC)
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Lovely, terse and perfect.

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kiwisue

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from: kiwisue
date: 5 July 2005 21:56 (UTC)
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Thank you for your great comment. I love your writing, so I'm very happy you thought well of mine.

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Mab of the Antipodes

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from: mab_browne
date: 4 July 2005 22:09 (UTC)
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This was a nifty little thing. Bodie goes for the sneak attack...

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P.R. Zed

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from: przed
date: 4 July 2005 23:34 (UTC)
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You managed to create such a lot of tension in such a short space. And you simply must continue it.

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kiwisue

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from: kiwisue
date: 5 July 2005 21:53 (UTC)
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Thanks for your kind words. Wrote another 1,000 or so words last night. but now I'm kinda stuck - I know what I want to do but the words aren't falling into place. So I'm going to leave it for the weekend.

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