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Ficlet - One Moment In Time

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29 November 2005 | 13:34
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posted by: probodie in the_safehouse

Title: One Moment In Time
Author: Zoë
Format: Ficlet
Genre: Slash
The Circuit Archive: Yes
The Hatstand Archive: Yes
Proslib: Yes
Disclaimer: Not mine, sadly
Summary: A moment in time with the boys
A/N: Written for crimson_37, and unbeta’d so all mistakes my own.




Bodie manoeuvered his sweat-slicked body over Ray’s, both men groaning in pleasure as certain parts of their anatomy touched. Leaning down for a long, passionate kiss, Bodie’s hand gravitated towards the curly locks that he had loved for so long. Caressing them and feeling their springiness only added to the realisation he was finally – finally - loving his partner.

Breaking off the kiss, Bodie paused for a couple of seconds to gaze down into the green pools that were staring up at him, desire and passion vying with another, yet unspoken emotion. He felt a hot arm come around his own body, trying to pull him closer, and a tremendous surge of affection and possessiveness powered through his body.

This was the moment when he, at long last, gave up his need for being alone and his look-after-number-one code. The moment when his own heart was ripped out of his body and handed to Ray on a platter for safekeeping. Whatever happened now was entirely up to Ray Doyle.

Something of the fear he was feeling must have showed in his face, because Ray’s jade green eyes appeared to get bigger, softening as they continued to look into Bodie’s own midnight blues. As Ray pulled him back into the tight embrace, Bodie heard him murmur, “Oh Bodie, you make me so hot.”

Another softer, reassuring kiss followed before Ray pushed him back up, one hand still around Bodie’s waist. Bodie felt Ray’s other hand curl around his face, one of his thumbs sweeping across his suddenly dry lips.

A fiercely growled, “I love you, Bodie. You’re mine, all mine,” sent Bodie’s heart spinning back down to earth, and with a smile that could have lit all London, Bodie gave himself, heart, body, and soul to the enigmatic, wanton, sensual being that was his partner.

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Nikki

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from: nakeisha
date: 29 November 2005 14:01 (UTC)
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So wonderfully loving.

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 29 November 2005 14:08 (UTC)
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Thanks Nikki - being as I have a shedload of fic to write now (ever wish you hadnt set something on? lol Naaa, Im enjoying myself actually), these arent going to be very long!

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Nikki

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from: nakeisha
date: 29 November 2005 15:58 (UTC)
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I shall duly await my turn :-)))

Enjoying is what it is all about.

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BrenK

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from: brenk
date: 29 November 2005 20:27 (UTC)
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I have to admit I was disappointed to see this hadn't been run past a beta. It might have helped with the spelling and punctuation, as there are quite a few mistakes there. Personal opinion, but isn't it worth taking a bit more time before posting to get rid of things like that?

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siluria

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from: siluria
date: 30 November 2005 20:44 (UTC)
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Would I get flamed if I begged to differ...?

Personally, I couldn't do without my spell-checker, but in other's fic I find if the imagery is powerful enough it makes any typos disappear. That's what happened here for me.

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 30 November 2005 21:14 (UTC)
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I did use a spellchecker, I always do, so I would like for someone to point out exactly what spelling typos there are,please :-)

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BrenK

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from: brenk
date: 1 December 2005 08:22 (UTC)
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I see you corrected the spello and some commas but also: some other line-edit type things:

- sweat-slicked has a hyphen.
- thumb's does not have an apostrophe. And
- comma after wanton.

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 1 December 2005 17:19 (UTC)
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Okay, ignore the first part of my comment - I realised after I sent it that I'd misread it. My bad...again.

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BrenK

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from: brenk
date: 1 December 2005 17:46 (UTC)
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No worries!

Plurals never have apostrophes. The way I learned them was that they 'belong' to something. As in people's (belongs to the people) or peoples (plural for various groups of people). Or they replace missing characters in contractions (didn't).

I can ramble forever about grammar stuff (maybe because I have to try and explain it to various writers *and get paid for it*. So if in doubt about something, I'm always ready to bore the pants off you :) :)

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 2 December 2005 00:02 (UTC)
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Thanks for that - obviously it seems I need help, and I may just take you up on it.

Any offers on how to read posts correctly BEFORE posting??? LOLLOL

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BrenK

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from: brenk
date: 2 December 2005 07:31 (UTC)
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Do! We rather odd editorish people never tire of explaining the Joys of the Semi-Colon or the Thrills of the Hyphen. And when people's eyes glaze over, we fix 'em. I do know it doesn't grab everybody (I work for some really great writers - non-fiction - who are simply never going to 'get' various things).

And then we editors get on the other side of the fence and pick up a pen to write... and make all the mistakes we'd recoil in horror over if it was somebody else's text (yes, yes, this is the person who sent in a very official report that spoke of 'ultra-violeNt light').

The *only* way I can produce typo-free texts is to take some distance - preferably weeks! So I prefer somebody else's eagle eye both for fanfic and professional (small p!) stuff. And I frequently crawl under my desk with embarrassment when I see things I've done. I've done far, FAR worse than ultra-violent light: can you imaging confusing Iraq and Iran in a rather sensitive situation? I still owe my corrector for that one (and it's probably why I still have a job).

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BrenK

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from: brenk
date: 1 December 2005 08:17 (UTC)
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I don't do flames. And sure you can beg to differ. And sure powerful writing can make typos seem fairly insignificant (not sure if they'd actually *disappear* for me, as I'm a professional editor).

I just prefer powerful writing WITH correct spelling and punctuation. It seems such a shame not to wait just that bit longer and either get somebody to give your stuff a quick check or take another look yourself. I think, personally, that getting something checked is a question of self respect but also respect for those readers who don't want to be thrown out of what could be a great story simply because the sheer amount of typos and other mistakes distract them.

I accept that betas aren't always at hand (at least immediately), and that writers are in a hurry to post and get feedback, but it's still a shame that they don't go that extra length and avoid the glitches. I don't think I'm the only person who twitches when seeing a whole bunch of things that a ten-minute edit could have eliminated.

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 30 November 2005 21:10 (UTC)
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Can you please tell me where the spelling and punctuation is incorrect?

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 30 November 2005 21:14 (UTC)
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Okay, I spotted a couple of punctuation mistakes - my bad - but I cannot for the life of me spot the spelling mistakes.

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siluria

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from: siluria
date: 30 November 2005 21:34 (UTC)
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Have to say the only one I can spot is 'manoevered' (should be maneuvered I think), but then as I can never spell that one any errors passed me by completely. If there are any others I have to say I have no idea what they are.

I still think the imagery is brilliant...!

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probodie

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from: probodie
date: 30 November 2005 21:38 (UTC)
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I hate my spellchecker!! It completely missed that one! I know I'm not usually bad at spelling, but I ALWAYS run a check prior to posting. Grrrr, very frustrating.

Thanks for your kind words too:-)

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siluria

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from: siluria
date: 30 November 2005 21:37 (UTC)
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Or maybe even 'manoeuvred'... I have no idea.

Told you I couldn't spell it :g:

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